Comments for chinese blog assignment

Just received the comments from my professor regarding my chinese blog assignment!!!
Again, thank you Daddy God for helping me out. Glory Be to God, Amen. (God told me not to worry about this assignment too!!!)
And of cos, my honey, my xin xin, ty's bro for checking and giving me their valuable comments :)))))))))). btw, xin xin, cher also said my essay is smooth flowing lor!!!!!-----cher said 有条有理 lor

The comments are as below: 我一字不漏地把老师的评语写下来 :p

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你好！你十分努力地阐述了华人应该努力学习中华文化，以及中华文化对经商的重要性，这点非常好。你的文章思路清晰，有条有理，很好！在遣词用字上，你的词语有些不合华文使用的规范，词语搭配也有一些不恰当之处，老师一一指出，如果你有什么疑问，可以找老师为你进一步解释。我想，你热爱中文、努力学中文，这一点非常可贵，但是要怎样才能学好呢？我想，还是得多看、多写，才会进步，希望你继续努力！

陈老师